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http://www.orthorehab.wisc.edu/pt/admissions/nonacademic_factors.shtml 威斯康星理疗项目

Personal Statement

The personal statement provides you with an opportunity to share with the Admissions Committee your personal characteristics and goals, and to give the Committee insight into your experiences and background. You are asked to divide your personal statement into two sections.


In the first section, please express your motivations for choosing physical therapy in 250 words or less.动机

In the second section, please describe your background and experiences as they pertain to your future success as a physical therapy student and professional. The UW-Madison Physical Therapy Program and the physical therapy profession believe that each individual's background and experiences contribute to the collective educational environment and facilitate the development of characteristics exhibited by successful physical therapists. You are strongly encouraged to address the uniqueness of your background and your diverse life experiences. You are limited to 500 words or less for this section. Submit your personal statement with the Physical Therapy Program Application Form.

经历和背景,说明有助于你将来成为一个理疗学生。一定要写出自己的个性以及丰富经历。(uniqueness of your background and your diverse life experiences.)

Personal statements must be typewritten and double-spaced. Please include your name on each page 双倍行距和打印,每页都写上姓名。

Personal Statement or Essay

General Advice

Your personal statement is a vital part of your application. It lets graduate schools, scholarship committees, or employers know something about you that is not reflected in your academic and extra curricular records or in your letters of recommendation. It is not a "prose resume" but a way for you to express yourself, through captured experiences, events, or beliefs. In the absence of a personal interview, your essay allows you to "shine" before the admissions or selection committee.


This is the part of the application to which the admissions committee turns if your motivation and decision is not clear to them after interviews or review of the secondary applications. Therefore, it is very important that you make clear your commitment to working with people in crisis as well as a passion for lifelong learning in the sciences.

Furthermore, a strong performance on the Writing Section of the MCAT can be quickly discounted by a poorly written personal statement; similarly, a poor performance on the timed MCAT essays may be countered by exhibiting strong writing skills in the essays for your AMCAS and secondary applications.


Before you write your personal statement, consider the following guidelines:

The statement must be well-written, with an introduction, body, and conclusion. (结构)
The statement must be grammatically correct and vividly written.
It must be personal. It is your opportunity to express your commitments, challenges, and values through your own personal story. (个性化的)
Do not describe activities that the admissions committee can learn about from the application. Use this opportunity to give NEW information that is not available anywhere else.
Think about the decision process you experienced while making the commitment to pursue the goal for which you are applying (a career in medicine or law, or the goal of your scholarship). Have there been formative events, people, or experiences along the way? Is there a story you could tell to explain your decision? (考虑一下你作出决策的过程)
The statement should in some manner answer the question of why this pursuit is for you AND what you can offer the profession in return.

Avoid gimmiky essays (such as an imaginary trial of an application with a wise jury deciding in the applicant's favor). Be careful about using humor as it can be taken differently by different readers. You may come across as arrogant, glib, or silly. (不要随意使用幽默)
Do not lecture the admissions or selection committee about what you feel is wrong with "the system." Instead, in a positive manner, present your own goals and hopes. (不要带着教训别人的手法)

Avoid extensive references to childhood or high school experiences. You must convince the admissions committee that you have made a well-informed adult decision to pursue this career or goal. (不要太多谈及童年或者高中)
If you were to bold and underline every use of "I" in your statement, is that all you would see on the page? While this must be a personal statement, be certain your interest in others comes through.
Turn negative experiences into positives by discussing what you have learned and how these challenges will make you better prepared in the future. (将消极的事件写成积极,得到了什么经历等)
Write a first draft. Do not be so paralyzed by the thought of putting something on paper that your application becomes delayed. Bring the first draft and these guidelines to your appointment with the Writing Center .

Let others read revised drafts.

Do some research to keep abreast of issues in health care and law as you prepare your personal statement.

Additional Resources for Medical School Statements

Writing Personal Statements
Most professional school applications ask for some form of personal statement. The AMCAS personal comments essay allows 5,300 characters, and the statements for most other professional programs are a little shorter. 5300个字符

Your statement is an important first impression! Most of your readers will be admissions committee members, often professional school faculty. If your GPA and test scores are marginal, your statement may make the difference between whether or not you get an interview. When you do interview, some of your questions will likely be drawn from your essay.

A well-written statement can also help recommendation writers, and, with some tuning, can be used to apply for related programs. If you are applying for a related program, e.g., KU Med's Primary Care Summer Mentoring Program, you should probably spend some time discussing the focus of that program, e.g., connections with an under-served community and interest in primary care medicine.如果参加某个项目,应该讨论某个项目的重点

You will have other places in your application to list your education and courses, volunteer and paid experiences, extracurricular activities, awards and honors, etc. Your statement should therefore become much more than yet another list. The statement gives you an opportunity to integrate, describe, explain, and share the meaning you attach to your activities. There is not one preferred format, but many ways of relating who you are to your interest in becoming a health care professional.

Questions to help you generate material for your essay:一些帮助你写作的问题 Note: You don't have to use them all, just use the ones that help.

Hint: As you go, think of little stories from your life that help answer the following questions.

1. Who are you?你是谁

Who are the most influential people in your life, and how have they influenced your development?最有影响力的人是谁,如何影响了你。

Where have you lived? And, how have your living environments shaped who you are, and why do you want to become a health care professional?

Would you describe yourself as coming from a disadvantaged background? If so, describe and explain the factors which have disadvantaged you.

How have you changed over time?发生什么改变

What are the most important events in your life?

What are the most important activities in your life?

What are your core values - what is important to you?核心价值是什么

What do you do for recreation, especially activities related to your chosen profession?

How are you different from other professional school applicants?

How have you demonstrated a strong work ethic?

How have you demonstrated communication skills?

How have you demonstrated management and leadership qualities?

How have you demonstrated teaching and counseling skills?

How have you demonstrated the ability to manage your time?

How have you involved yourself in community, cultural and social service activities?

How have you demonstrated the ability to live and work with people from different cultural backgrounds?

2. How have prepared yourself to become a health care professional?:

How did you decide to become a member of the profession?

How have you demonstrated your passion for the profession?

How have you worked with patients and health care professionals?

How have you been involved in scientific research?

How does the possibility of becoming a health care professional make you feel?

Do you intend to serve an underserved population or community? If so, how have you demonstrated your connection and commitment to this population?

If you could not become a member of the profession, what would you do?

What other careers have you considered?

What reservations do you have about entering the profession?

What can you do as a member of the profession that you could not do in other professions?

What characteristics do you believe a member of the profession should possess?

What are your professional goals?

3. If there are difficulties in your application, inquiring minds would like to know:

If you are re-applying, what have you done since your last application?

Why are there gaps in your academic and work records?

Why have there been changes in your academic performance?

Why have you attended numerous undergraduate institutions?

Why have you withdrawn from multiple courses?

Why are there inconsistencies between your academic record and standardized test scores?

What have you learned from experiencing these difficulties?


Now that you have generated some ingredients for your essay, hopefully several pages worth, here are some tips for mixing the ingredients together:

Make your statement personal. Please don't derive your statement from a friend's essay, or the first example you find in a book. Also, don't rely heavily on quotes, clichés or platitudes (over-used truisms). Use you own words! 一定要注意:不要引用别人的名言或者陈词滥调

Organize your statement. Let your structure flow from the content you have chosen. Many people organize chronologically. If you choose this approach, maintain the flow. Don't send your readers from high school to college, then suddenly back to grade school. Many essays use both time and another type of element, e.g., a chronology of personal stories, life changing events, places you've lived, important activities, influential people, or recurring themes. If you choose to organize with a feature other than time, let your readers know what you are using. Although the essay is short enough that it doesn't demand a full summary, it is nice have a small, concluding paragraph that pulls elements together, serves as a bookend for your introduction, and/or foreshadow your plans for the future. 组织文章的结构

Show with true stories. Rather than telling your reader you are compassionate, you can illustrate your compassion with little, descriptive vignettes. Well-written anecdotes are fun to read, memorable, and humanizing.

Provide details, examples, and explanations. Name the people (except the patients) and places (towns, schools, etc.), Describe how you were involved in research projects, What you did as a health care volunteer; etc. Who, what, when, where, how, and (sometimes) why?提供具体的事例

Support your assertions. If you want to say you value helping people, try giving an example before making the assertion. If space is tight, it is often better to give examples, and let your readers draw their own conclusions.

Write with feeling! Admission committee members are looking for a passion for the profession. One way to convey your passion, is to use emotional language. Write and talk about your feelings!带有感情色彩地写

Go deep. Saying you want to help people and like science doesn't cut deep enough. It doesn't differentiate you from any of the other candidates who are applying, and doesn't differentiate the role you desire from the countless other careers that involve helping with science. What can you do as a member of the profession that you could not do in other professions?要有深度

Offer explanations for significant weaknesses. The line between explanation and excuse is very thin. Have some readers help you find where that line lies. Take responsibility for your decisions, especially regarding the use of your time.解释和申辩的界线很模糊

Constructively fill most of the space you are given. If you leave three-fourths of the space blank, readers will assume that you are not an interesting person and/or have not done much to prepare yourself for the profession.

Use everyday words. Rather than trying to demonstrate your vocabulary by using obscure words, use a variety of appropriate words. If you must use technical terms, provide definitions. Try not to send your readers running to a dictionary. It is important for health care professionals to show they can communicate clearly with people from a variety of backgrounds.不要用生僻的词语

Avoid criticizing members of the profession. Some candidates try to argue that they want to become doctors, because they think they could do a better job than some of the doctors they have seen. This sets a negative tone, and invites a defensive reaction. Without being a doctor, you cannot fully appreciate the demands of the job, and the realities which often lead to less than ideal health care.不要批评某个专业,比如不要说你想成为医生因为你见到的某个医生不专业

Avoid using too many "I's." When writing a personal comments essay, it is easy to use too many "I's," especially at the beginning of sentences. Some strategies for reducing I's include using other personal pronouns (e.g., we), chaining (e.g., I did this. I did that. I did the other = I did this, that and the other.), and removing unnecessary double I's (e.g., I believe I want = I want). 不要用太多的I

Avoid using contractions. The essay is a formal enough work that most writing guides suggest using full words rather than contractions (e.g., don't use "don't"). I have seen a couple of exceptions in which the tone of the essays was so informal that contractions were a better fit. 不要缩写,不要用don't,要写得正式

Watch out for the grammar police. Unfortunately, many admissions committee members attended schools at a time when violating grammar conventions was a punishable offense. Some rules, like always putting subjects before verbs and never ending sentences with prepositions, are dated or never really were rules at all. Others, like getting your verbs to agree, are (not "is") still in effect. For the purpose of this essay, it's probably wise to follow both current and dated conventions. One of my favorite grammar links is ccc.commnet.edu/grammar.

Have readers review your statement. Have friends, parents, recommendation writers (including a member of the profession), a department advisor, and English teachers review your statement.