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The following is brought to you courtesy of Thomas J. Lindell, Ph.D., Department of Molecular and Cellular Biology. 亚利桑那大学分子与细胞生物系Thomas J. Lindell博士对如何些好ps的意见。I have another perspective that is gained from having served on the Admissions committee at the University of Arizona College of Medicine. 他曾经在亚利桑那医学院招生委员会工作。

Personal statements should be interesting and informative. You need to understand that this is your only direct connection to the Admissions Committee-- everything else is "filtered" through someone else i.e. Letters of recommendation or reports of interviews etc.

应该有趣和有信息含量,是你与招生委员会直接接触的唯一机会

You need to sell yourself! Your really do not have a choice. You must be proactive about advocating why you want to enter postgraduate training. The reader will want to know that you understand what you're getting into. Relevant experiences are therefore important to relate. If medical school is your goal, are you doing this for the right reason?

应该懂得买自己。应该主动介绍自己,提及相关的经历。

You must be prepared to "tell your story". In my experience, too many young people are reluctant to tell their story. They think that they are bragging or being arrogant. Remember, if you do not tell your own story, no one else will. You cannot assume that those who will write about you will capture what you yourself want others to know about you.

应该讲述自己的故事。 It is easier to sell the " product" (you) if you know who you are. Most students who are bound for postgraduate programs do not need to be motivated. They should, however, have a good sense of how well they fit into that career. They should also have some significant knowledge of who they are. Students, who expect to become physicians, have no business treating other people's problems unless they have attended to their own first.

了解自己后才能更好地把自己买个好价。

Start thinking about what you want to say early-- do not wait until the last minute. Keep notes to yourself about things that you feel are revealing about yourself. After you write your story, put it away for a few days before revising/editing it. This will give you an opportunity to get a fresh look at it, if you have the time.

在写完之后放两天,然后再修改。

Personal statements do not need to be chronological. They should be written with some "flair" and attention to who the reader is. Remember, the reader is some overworked member of an admissions committee who is doing this out of a sense of duty. Your job is to entertain them and create a story that will capture their attention. I recommend that you attempt to tell the most captivating part of your story in the first part of the essay. The reader, after reading many of these in a given review session, tends to find successive personal statements run together. Your challenge is then to make your statement unique-- just as you are unique.

个人陈述并不是一定要按照时间顺序,应该通过自己的故事吸引住招生处的人。
As in any writing, the statement should "flow" together. The paragraphs should blend in a coherent manner. 一定要注重逻辑。


More on: Writing Your Personal Statement如何写作个人陈述

PLAN, PLAN, PLAN- The better your plan, the easier it will be to write your statement and to revise it. Have some sort of idea in mind before you start writing. Use a concept map, use an outline, do something to organize your thinking. 计划、计划、计划

Determine your purpose in writing your statement- you want to convince an admissions committee that you are the right person, you have thought about this decision, you can handle the material and have the motivation to succeed in your field. 确定写作目的,说服对方。

Determine the content of your statement. 确定内容。
Determine your approach and the style of your statement. There is no set style. Your statement should be coherent and mature. 确定风格。

Draft #1 - When you write this draft, work to get your ideas down. Focus on giving a general impression of why you should be admitted. 给出概括性的印象

Draft #2 - Begin by re-reading your first draft. Figure out what the thesis or main claim should be. Revise to form your thesis.

Draft #3 - Think about the organization of your essay. Decide the best way to support your thesis and build your argument. Is it chronological? By topic? Revise your essay focusing on organization.
Read through your essay thinking about word choice sentence structure and grammar. Revise to improve style and grammar. 考虑单词顺序和结构

Did your use clichés without explaining them? (I like to help people, rewarding, incredible, fascinating, significant, meant a lot to me?)不要用些陈词滥调

http://ag.arizona.edu/arec-graduates/application_forms/personal_statemt.html

Tips on Writing a Personal Statement 写作ps技巧

The Personal Statement is a very important aspect of the application process. Everything else the Graduate Committee learns about you is from someone else, Letters of Recommendation, etc. This is your opportunity to connect with the members of the Graduate Committee in your own words. The Graduate Admissions Committee carefully reviews this document. Cover the following points:招生委员会要认真关注以下几点。

What are your Career Goals? 职业目标
Describe undergraduate and/or postgraduate research experience 本科研究经历
Why do you wish to pursue Graduate Studies in Agricultural and Resource Economics (AREC) at the University of Arizona? Be specific. 为何要选择某个项目,应该具体。

What research interests do you have in common with members of the AREC faculty? See Faculty Profiles你与这个项目的成员有没有共同的研究兴趣。

? Describe your long range professional plans. Do you intend to pursue a Ph.D. program? What type of work do you plan to pursue upon completion of your Graduate Studies program?你的长期职业目标是什么,博士吗?毕业后准备做什么。


It's important to relate any relevant experiences you might have. How well prepared are you to enter our Graduate Program? What have you been doing to prepare yourself to meet your career goals?


Tell your story. This is not to say tell your whole life's story in a novel length document. Keep your Personal Statement as short in length as possible. Tell enough about yourself to reveal to the Graduate Committee how well you fit your career goals and are prepared to enter a Graduate Studies program. Promote yourself. Don't assume the Letters of Recommendation have captured what you are all about to the Graduate Committee. Make your Personal Statement interesting and informative. It doesn't have to be chronological.
讲述你自己的故事。Ps应该尽量短。

Be proactive about advocating why you want to enter postgraduate training. The Graduate Committee wants to see by your Personal Statement that you've done your homework and researched our program and faculty and that you know what you're getting into. The Graduate Committee will be looking to see if you are a good match to our program.

应该积极主动
It is imperative that you use good English in your Personal Statement. The Personal Statement is your demonstration to the Graduate Committee that you have the competency and writing skills to handle writing a Master's Thesis. It might be helpful to have another set of eyes to help you proof your Personal Statement to locate any spelling mistakes, grammatical errors, incorrect punctuation, etc. 英语要好,ps是你自己能够写好论文的证明。

原文http://www.law.arizona.edu/admissions/application.htm法学院

Personal Statement (Item 19 on Application Form): The College of Law is particularly interested in students who, by virtue of their background and experience, will add to the intellectual climate and diversity of the student body. We therefore require that you include a personal statement describing any special characteristics, background or experience that would help us achieve our goal of a dynamic and diverse student body. Your personal statement should be a typed, concise and well-drafted document of approximately 2 to 3 pages single-spaced. There is no page limit. All materials submitted are reviewed. The personal statement should tell your "story". It must be your written work and it should demonstrate your writing ability and highlight your unique characteristics, which may include: educational and occupational experiences, economic disadvantages, significant or extracurricular activities, talents and special interests, involvement in community affairs or public service, colleges attended, course of study, grade trends, graduate work, race or cultural background, and any personal experiences which have influenced your life.

法学院对申请者的背景和经历非常感兴趣,希望申请者有助于学生团体的多样性。因此ps需要写名申请者的特点、背景和经历。2到3页,单行。应该讲述你的故事。包括的方面有:经济背景、重要的活动、技能、兴趣、参与公共事务的情况、学习能力、研究工作、文化背景等影响你生活的方方面面。

波士顿大学http://sirius.bu.edu/withers/pppp/original/carter_ps.txt

Carter Personal Statement

I explore planets. This requires knowledge of the astrophysics of the Sun, chemistry of comets, geology of rocky planets, atmospheric dynamics of gaseous planets, mineralogy of meteorites, and the biochemistry of life.

By its very nature, planetary science is interdisciplinary. Planetary scientists have academic backgrounds as diverse as the afore-mentioned research fields. "Interdisciplinary" is not a buzzword or a passing fad in planetary science, but an absolute necessity. For example, planetary scientists studying the atmosphere of Venus were among the first to discuss the greenhouse effect and atmospheric chemistry of halogens, which are the keys to global warming and the ozone hole on the Earth, respectively.

In my first two years as a graduate student, my research projects have included analysing dynamics of the martian upper atmosphere, investigating medieval chronicles for evidence for a recent large impact on the Moon, mapping previously undiscovered ridges and folds on the martian surface, modelling asteroid shapes, and testing simple climate models.

I think I will be a better scientist if I maintain this research breadth in the future, rather than narrowly focusing on, for example, weather on Venus or erosion on Mars. The Carter Interdisciplinary Fellowship will help me do that. It will fund me to pursue projects that are not directly related to my academic advisor's focused research grants.

I hope to finish my PhD in the next few years by completing a couple of my current research projects. During that time, I also want to initiate some small research projects in areas I have not yet studied, like the nature of planets outside our solar system or telescopic studies within our solar system. My aim is that these will be learning experiences, ones that will not necessarily be included in my final thesis, but ones which will help me in the future.

Teaching and research are closely related. In a field that is evolving as rapidly as planetary science, where each new spacecraft mission changes our understanding of the solar system, familiarity with current research is essential for teaching. Having satisfied my department's teaching requirements, I am unlikely to serve as a formal teaching assistant in my final years of PhD research. However, I want to continue telling people how fascinating studying planets can be. Traditional teaching assistant roles in my department are limited to grading and holding office hours in general education classes but I hope to deliver occasional lectures in these classes and lead some discussions in our freshman colloquium series. These experiences will make me much better prepared for teaching at the faculty level.

Planetary exploration cannot occur without public support, and galvanising that support is something that I must become involved in as I become a working planetary scientist. Luckily, it is easy to make planetary science accessible and important to a general audience. It is made accessible by the basic nature of the questions planetary science tries to answer, questions like "Are there earthquakes on Mars?", "Why do we have a Moon?", and "Are there planets around other stars?" The importance becomes clear when given answers like "We don't know, but finding out would help us understand earthquakes here on Earth", "We think it's was formed in a huge asteroid impact on the Earth many years ago, but if it wasn't there our climate would be much less hospitable to life", and "We know they exist, but don't even know how large they are, much less what they look like." Once I have started publishing my research in professional journals, and feel like I am a real scientist, then I hope to give some talks in the local community and write some articles for a local paper. For me, it's important to explain to people what their taxes are being spent on, and why.

My plans for after graduate school are firm in my mind. I came to Tucson from Great Britain to study planetary science because there was very little planetary science happening in Great Britain and the Planetary Sciences Department here is the best in the world [Visiting Committee Report, 1997]. In 2003 a British spacecraft will land on Mars. It will study the soil and atmosphere for traces of extant or extinct life, photograph the landscape, and record the weather. Britain has never flown an interplanetary spacecraft before and a successful mission would help planetary science in Britain like nothing else I can imagine. If it fails, it may be a generation before Britain makes a comparable commitment to planetary science. If it suceeds, it is likely that government support in Britain for planetary science would drastically increase.

When I graduate, I want to help make it a success.

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