The following is brought to you courtesy of Thomas J. Lindell, Ph.D., Department of Molecular and Cellular Biology. 亚利桑那大学分子与细胞生物系Thomas J. Lindell博士对如何些好ps的意见。I have another perspective that is gained from having served on the Admissions committee at the University of Arizona College of Medicine. 他曾经在亚利桑那医学院招生委员会工作。
Personal statements should be interesting and informative. You need to
understand that this is your only direct connection to the Admissions
Committee-- everything else is "filtered" through someone else
i.e. Letters of recommendation or reports of interviews etc.
You need to sell yourself! Your really do not have a choice. You must
be proactive about advocating why you want to enter postgraduate training.
The reader will want to know that you understand what you're getting into.
Relevant experiences are therefore important to relate. If medical school
is your goal, are you doing this for the right reason?
You must be prepared to "tell your story". In my experience, too many young people are reluctant to tell their story. They think that they are bragging or being arrogant. Remember, if you do not tell your own story, no one else will. You cannot assume that those who will write about you will capture what you yourself want others to know about you.
应该讲述自己的故事。 It is easier to sell the " product" (you) if you
know who you are. Most students who are bound for postgraduate programs
do not need to be motivated. They should, however, have a good sense of
how well they fit into that career. They should also have some significant
knowledge of who they are. Students, who expect to become physicians,
have no business treating other people's problems unless they have attended
to their own first.
Personal statements do not need to be chronological. They should be written
with some "flair" and attention to who the reader is. Remember,
the reader is some overworked member of an admissions committee who is
doing this out of a sense of duty. Your job is to entertain them and create
a story that will capture their attention. I recommend that you attempt
to tell the most captivating part of your story in the first part of the
essay. The reader, after reading many of these in a given review session,
tends to find successive personal statements run together. Your challenge
is then to make your statement unique-- just as you are unique.
PLAN, PLAN, PLAN- The better your plan, the easier it will be to write your statement and to revise it. Have some sort of idea in mind before you start writing. Use a concept map, use an outline, do something to organize your thinking. 计划、计划、计划
Determine your purpose in writing your statement- you want to convince an admissions committee that you are the right person, you have thought about this decision, you can handle the material and have the motivation to succeed in your field. 确定写作目的，说服对方。
Determine the content of your statement. 确定内容。
Draft #1 - When you write this draft, work to get your ideas down. Focus on giving a general impression of why you should be admitted. 给出概括性的印象
Draft #2 - Begin by re-reading your first draft. Figure out what the thesis or main claim should be. Revise to form your thesis.
Draft #3 - Think about the organization of your essay. Decide the best
way to support your thesis and build your argument. Is it chronological?
By topic? Revise your essay focusing on organization.
Did your use clichés without explaining them? (I like to help people, rewarding, incredible, fascinating, significant, meant a lot to me?)不要用些陈词滥调
Tips on Writing a Personal Statement 写作ps技巧
What are your Career Goals? 职业目标
What research interests do you have in common with members of the AREC faculty? See Faculty Profiles你与这个项目的成员有没有共同的研究兴趣。
? Describe your long range professional plans. Do you intend to pursue a Ph.D. program? What type of work do you plan to pursue upon completion of your Graduate Studies program?你的长期职业目标是什么，博士吗？毕业后准备做什么。
Be proactive about advocating why you want to enter postgraduate training. The Graduate Committee wants to see by your Personal Statement that you've done your homework and researched our program and faculty and that you know what you're getting into. The Graduate Committee will be looking to see if you are a good match to our program.
Personal Statement (Item 19 on Application Form): The College of Law is particularly interested in students who, by virtue of their background and experience, will add to the intellectual climate and diversity of the student body. We therefore require that you include a personal statement describing any special characteristics, background or experience that would help us achieve our goal of a dynamic and diverse student body. Your personal statement should be a typed, concise and well-drafted document of approximately 2 to 3 pages single-spaced. There is no page limit. All materials submitted are reviewed. The personal statement should tell your "story". It must be your written work and it should demonstrate your writing ability and highlight your unique characteristics, which may include: educational and occupational experiences, economic disadvantages, significant or extracurricular activities, talents and special interests, involvement in community affairs or public service, colleges attended, course of study, grade trends, graduate work, race or cultural background, and any personal experiences which have influenced your life.
Carter Personal Statement
I explore planets. This requires knowledge of the astrophysics of the Sun, chemistry of comets, geology of rocky planets, atmospheric dynamics of gaseous planets, mineralogy of meteorites, and the biochemistry of life.
By its very nature, planetary science is interdisciplinary. Planetary scientists have academic backgrounds as diverse as the afore-mentioned research fields. "Interdisciplinary" is not a buzzword or a passing fad in planetary science, but an absolute necessity. For example, planetary scientists studying the atmosphere of Venus were among the first to discuss the greenhouse effect and atmospheric chemistry of halogens, which are the keys to global warming and the ozone hole on the Earth, respectively.
In my first two years as a graduate student, my research projects have included analysing dynamics of the martian upper atmosphere, investigating medieval chronicles for evidence for a recent large impact on the Moon, mapping previously undiscovered ridges and folds on the martian surface, modelling asteroid shapes, and testing simple climate models.
I think I will be a better scientist if I maintain this research breadth in the future, rather than narrowly focusing on, for example, weather on Venus or erosion on Mars. The Carter Interdisciplinary Fellowship will help me do that. It will fund me to pursue projects that are not directly related to my academic advisor's focused research grants.
I hope to finish my PhD in the next few years by completing a couple of my current research projects. During that time, I also want to initiate some small research projects in areas I have not yet studied, like the nature of planets outside our solar system or telescopic studies within our solar system. My aim is that these will be learning experiences, ones that will not necessarily be included in my final thesis, but ones which will help me in the future.
Teaching and research are closely related. In a field that is evolving as rapidly as planetary science, where each new spacecraft mission changes our understanding of the solar system, familiarity with current research is essential for teaching. Having satisfied my department's teaching requirements, I am unlikely to serve as a formal teaching assistant in my final years of PhD research. However, I want to continue telling people how fascinating studying planets can be. Traditional teaching assistant roles in my department are limited to grading and holding office hours in general education classes but I hope to deliver occasional lectures in these classes and lead some discussions in our freshman colloquium series. These experiences will make me much better prepared for teaching at the faculty level.
Planetary exploration cannot occur without public support, and galvanising that support is something that I must become involved in as I become a working planetary scientist. Luckily, it is easy to make planetary science accessible and important to a general audience. It is made accessible by the basic nature of the questions planetary science tries to answer, questions like "Are there earthquakes on Mars?", "Why do we have a Moon?", and "Are there planets around other stars?" The importance becomes clear when given answers like "We don't know, but finding out would help us understand earthquakes here on Earth", "We think it's was formed in a huge asteroid impact on the Earth many years ago, but if it wasn't there our climate would be much less hospitable to life", and "We know they exist, but don't even know how large they are, much less what they look like." Once I have started publishing my research in professional journals, and feel like I am a real scientist, then I hope to give some talks in the local community and write some articles for a local paper. For me, it's important to explain to people what their taxes are being spent on, and why.
My plans for after graduate school are firm in my mind. I came to Tucson from Great Britain to study planetary science because there was very little planetary science happening in Great Britain and the Planetary Sciences Department here is the best in the world [Visiting Committee Report, 1997]. In 2003 a British spacecraft will land on Mars. It will study the soil and atmosphere for traces of extant or extinct life, photograph the landscape, and record the weather. Britain has never flown an interplanetary spacecraft before and a successful mission would help planetary science in Britain like nothing else I can imagine. If it fails, it may be a generation before Britain makes a comparable commitment to planetary science. If it suceeds, it is likely that government support in Britain for planetary science would drastically increase.
When I graduate, I want to help make it a success.