Personal Statement Writing Guide
Introducing You 引人入胜的开头，不要陈词滥句
'' I always wanted to study dentistry"
Start your personal statement with an interesting event. Study the sample introductory paragraph below and the analysis of the introduction which follows it.用一个有趣的故事开头，学习以下段落的写法
"I am fascinated with dentistry because I love to network and build computers. If I spoke these words aloud, many people would scratch their heads and appear confused. At first glance, this statement appears absurd. On a closer look, however, it makes perfect sense.When I work on computers, I must operate within a tiny space inside a computer cache, taking extreme care to avoid damaging the delicate equipment. As a dentist, I will also perform my duties within the smallest of spaces, using tiny instruments on fragile surfaces."
This paragraph contains all the elements of a good introduction. It includes a gripping statement that compels the reader to keep going. Once you have established a good introduction, you are ready to write about your qualifications and experiences in your subject area. 开头能够让读者继续阅读下去
The Body 主体：每个段落应该有主题句，而且段落衔接紧凑
"By combining these disciplines into a dual degree program, I can pursue my professional goal of doing education and military policy work for the government and perhaps teaching at university level. My experience as a Homeless Specialist has not only equipped me with an intellectual foundation for my future studies but has also supplied me with my career plans. After gaining knowledge of both psychology and political techniques at the highly regarded Manchester University, I plan to work for social services to use my knowledge of human behaviour to aid members of the public. My efforts paid off. At the end of the year, our team performed well and I ended up winning an 'Outstanding Student Award.' More important than the award, however, was the realisation that I had found my future career-in a courtroom. This time, however, the cases will be real."